Line 1. No comma needed Line 2. Missing apostrophe in "someones"; "theif" is not a word Lines 3–4. Sentence fragment Lines 6–8. Change in tense ("... can't even define ..." and "... will purposely ignore ...") Line 9. Sentence fragment Line 10. "Fuck" is not an adjective Line 11. No comma after "but" Line 12. "... felt like to win" Lines 13–14. Hyphenate "higher tier" Line 16. Use a semicolon or period between independent clauses Line 18. Comma after "say" when introducing dialogue; "blinding" is not an adverb Line 19. Quotation marks after period, not before Line 20. No comma after "language" Line 25. Missing apostrophe in "forums"; no comma after me"; missing apostrophe in "wont" Line 26. Unnecessary quotation marks around "imply" Line 27–28. "Unfortunantly"; poor use of the passive voice Line 29. "Use" should be in the past tense Line 30. Missing apostrophe in "devils"; unnecessary quotation marks around "devil[']s. Twister is the ultimate grammar nazi now.TAKE THE CROWN BACK!
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Your name reminds me of a charcter named Laxus.
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Here, silly!
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My loving admiration will forever be unrequited. I can live with that, though. I'm a resilient mofo!!
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Wow. I hate you. It was a point of principle, too. Nothing crushes me more than failing to live up to my principles.
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(Please don't break my heart.)
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I haven't slept in two nights; I promise to be back on top of my game in due time.
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I like the way you carry yourself.
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It doesn't, but most of that time was spent idling for Portal 2 release faster.
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